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How to Write a Bill | Paradyse Oakley | TEDxCrenshaw


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second semester of sixth grade my dad

was incarcerated and for two years I

went through the process of missing

school to go to trial

trying to understand my feelings so I

would write them out to interpret what I

was going through and missing my father

I remember the visits to in particular

one was when we go for an hour and a

half just to get there in a hot Sun and

almost God denied because our birth

certificates were damaged because of

going so often Saturday and Sunday to

see him and they were damaged so that

was like oh we’re waiting in line for a

hour and a half and possibly can’t see

him

the other would be playing the 50-50

chance of seeing him waiting in line and

possibly not being able to see him

because of so many visitors trying to

see their loved ones in prison and tenth

grade I went to a summer workshop on

writing and I was able to meet a

professor who was writing a novel at the

time that was identical to my life story

of having someone I loved incarcerated

and he told me about two programs

he said project would and it’s an

Oakland so it’s like can’t go to Oakland

so and he told me about pops pane of the

prison system which is a high school

program that gives students the

opportunity to express themselves

through art by taking pictures rapping

on songs and writing writing their

experiences of someone who they have

incarcerated any type of abuse they’ve

felt during their whole life so ninth

through twelfth graders after that I

launched it at my school in November

and you think government with the YMCA

was just starting and I was very

passionate about having a voice for

students who have incarcerated family

members or who suffered from abuse so I

told my delegation I was like we should

write a bill to provide social-emotional

counseling for high school students

dealing with any kind of issues and we

had a vote we had two other bills one

was pets for vets which would provide

veterans the opportunity to own a pet to

decrease their stress and another one

which was really good for the

environment would be recycling to have

grocery stores a place to donate

recyclables and my bill one so we did

research and we were able to find out

that if you are children who have a

loved one incarcerated you have Bill of

Rights you have the right to be informed

whether your parent is incarcerated you

have the right to have counseling and

someone to talk to while you’re going

through your dad or your mother’s

incarceration so we were able to do

research for about three months and when

the time was coming for us to go to

Sacramento and sit in the chambers of

the assembly in the Senate I was the

bill sponsor so I got up in front of the

crowd and I told them my story and I

said we need this we need

social-emotional counseling for high

school students not only for

incarceration because in committee we

said oh that’s a little like too narrow

so we opened it up because in the book

it’s immigration it’s abuse it’s trauma

and all these other things that students

in high school face and they don’t

express themselves because of the stigma

and the shame that they have so we

wanted to give them the opportunity to

express themselves through writing

through anything so it got passed in my

own

my house and they went to so we got past

and go to simply and they want to go

it’s in it and luckily I met this guy on

the elevator and I was excused and goes

sitting I was trying to find somebody

for like the whole three days I couldn’t

find anyone so I’m on the elevator and

I’m like you’re in gold salmon because

we wear badges and he’s like yes I’m

like would you sponsor my bill

he said sure what is it so I gave him an

and luckily when he went to his next

committee it was the first bill and he

got it passed so it was great and then

after that because you think government

it’s a high school program that gives

high school students the opportunity to

play roles of our officials so we have a

lieutenant governor which he makes a

budget for the whole delegation so he

has up he’s like education everything

transportation would all we need to

focus our money on and he said I was

talking I was like could you sign my

bill he said what is it and I was like

telling him everything so I was he was

like yeah when it when it comes to my

desk I will sign it and I was like did

you sign it yet and then he said yes he

came by and he signed my bill and he

said that he would on all the bills that

were signed in the whole using

government for 2015-2016 it would go to

attend all the real Governor Jerry Brown

so that was pretty amazing I’m still

waiting to hear back about that also a

couple of months ago because it’s

election season my dad he’s incarcerated

so and he was telling us to like watch

out for the props and make sure that

we’re making the right decisions so I’m

the like I said I’m a youth activist so

I make sure my friends they’ll go out

and vote

and sometimes I prep them on like the

the props and I was just telling them

like you guys got a vote and make sure

you guys read the props and yeah so that

was really great and oh this is a

picture of me my sister Lacey she’s

seven and my middle sister Paris and

she’s 12 and in this picture me and my

sister Paris we haven’t seen our dad in

a whole year because he moved all the

way up north which was probably like

that eight hour drive so we were able to

get with get on the bus which gives

students and families the opportunity to

see their parents on mother’s days and

fathers days to spend the whole day and

do arts and crafts and not have a screen

and a telephone to talk to you you’re

able to touch your dad hug your dad and

my sister Paris because it’s been a long

time for her not to see your dad she

broke down in tears and crying she was

crying like so life so hard that it made

me cry even though I didn’t want to but

she have to express yourself that’s

something I learned in pops too so I was

just crying and it was very good thing

because we don’t talk about it a lot we

talk about it

but I usually just write my feelings and

send him a letter of how I’m feeling and

it was really great for her to express

herself because sometimes she doesn’t

write him but we try our best so yes and

I want you guys to know that you guys

have the ability to do the same thing

that I’ve been doing which is the

process of writing a bill if you guys

don’t like anything in your community or

in your neighborhood or anything that

you would like to change if you guys are

still at school I don’t know you have

the opportunity to do that the change is

in your hands if you see something all

you have to do is write it out you guys

can probably get in the group of four or

five friends that you have and start an

interest group which is a group of

people who have the same like like want

to change something and you guys can

research it see what educational

which code you would like to change and

how would you like to see it change and

I would walk you guys through the

process of writing a bill the first step

is coming up with an idea so my idea was

to have social-emotional counseling

available for high school students the

second step was research so me and my

group we spent three months researching

all educational codes and they have

educational codes for epidemics which is

counselors that make sure that you’re on

track in school vocational which make

sure you go to college and are on track

but they don’t have social-emotional

counseling for students to deal with

their feelings so we thought that was

something that was lacking in the

educational code it was an act because

it was very new it wasn’t a resolution

which would be something that like you

just made up off of anything so it was

an act to amend an educational code and

first step was to be the title of a bill

and to title the bill you won’t give it

any other name you’ll just put it as an

act to and then finish the sentence

Step five preamble it would just be the

body or not the body it’ll be like the

clause whereas and amending it

um step six is enacting or resolving a

clause will be enacting which means you

would like to like when would you like

to see it put it in place so we said

immediately and we found out that it

would only cost the taxpayers twenty one

cent to implement the program to provide

social-emotional counseling and step

seven would be the body and the bill is

broken down into one and then you can

indent it and keep going what you would

like to say so it’s very simple and step

eight is to get sponsors so you guys

have the opportunity to connect with

your council members or just anyone that

you know is in the public arena and have

them have a luncheon with them and

why are you passionate about it and how

do you see this being taken in place and

that’s it [Applause]

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